One of my classmates on the campus is Erdha Fitriana. Her nickname is Erdha. She has long hair, tall, slim, and she has a bright skin. She usually wears glasses when she studies in the class. She is only one girl in her family. She always riding a motorcycle while she goes to the campus. Her hobbies are swimming and sightseeing. She likes sightseeing to hunt the food. Favorite food is Western food. She likes Western food because it is delicious food. I think that she is good person, always cheerful, and caring with her friends. She always makes me laugh especially when I'm sad. I am happy to have a friend like her.
Topic: One of my classmates on the campus
Controlling idea: Erdha Fitriana
Topic: One of my classmates on the campus
Controlling idea: Erdha Fitriana
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OK, nice writing galz. However, u forget to underline the TS, including the topic and controlling idea. Dealing with the title, u should correct that to be 'My Cheerful Friend'. Mind ur grammar, the parallel sentence, and the use of sentence. Well, it's better as well to analyze the concluding paragraph:-) In short, it's nicer than the draft u made. Nice effort then.
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